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"I won’t be doing a review, but I will give you some tips on attracting attention and help you improve.

The first thing you should do is supply a description of your comic so people who find your comic can read it and decide whether or not they will be interested in your comic. When I clicked on your comic I have no idea what it was about beside it was about pokemon.

Your comic is incredibly hard to find as well. I searched both pokemon and nuzlocke (I think this is a nuzlocke?) and it didn’t appear at all. I don’t have a comic, so I’m not sure, but there is probably a way to tag your work so that it shows up when searching for these two things.

There are a lot of ways you can fix up your site’s design. I would use a different color than dark red. You should use colors that are pleasing to the eyes. Lighter colors (pastels and white) create a more lighthearted atmosphere, while dimed colors (greyer colors and greys) can either cause melancholy, tension, or fear. These are very useful colors and I’m sure you can find a guide to help you find the perfect color for what feeling you want to convey. Colors you do not want to use are bright colors, dark colors, blacks, and dark greys. Making the screen too dark make people irritable and can strain on their attention. You can make them work, but there is a lot of scheming, color mixing, and placing that I really don’t want to go into right now, and you probably don’t want to either.

Everything is oddly placed right. I know the navigation bar is pushing everything to the right. Having to scroll side to side is a lot more inconvenient than up and down. You want to minimalize side scrolling as much as you can. I would either convert to a top navbar, or shrink the one you have so the entire comic is on the screen horizontally.
I think you should choose one media to work in. You don’t really have the skill to combine traditional and digital together in a seamless way. If you decide to go with traditional, I would invest in a scanner. Also, do not draw comics on lined paper. That stuff is for writing notes, not drawing comics. You should draw a single page on one piece of paper.

The last thing I’ll say is that you should probably make a new banner. The font you used for your comic is hard to read, I already brought up color issues from before (they apply here as well), and you are using images that aren’t yours (pretty awfully I might add). That only works if you are doing a sprite comic where you are already using someone else’s artwork to begin with. Given that you are drawing everything, you should only use your own art work, as this helps people who might want to read your comic see what your art looks like in advance.

This stuff is pretty much the basics of creating a webcomic. I won’t be going over art or story, though I will say they are pretty poorly done as well. All the things I mentioned are easily fixable, and might help you gain attention. Honestly some of this stuff comes to people so easily, that you might come off as a troll, or not really taking this seriously, most people here have put hours into creating their comics and a lot of them have been studying art and storytelling for years. If you want a proper review, you need to really work hard and spend a lot of time fine tuning everything. Everything must be polished where you have nothing to say to improve it, and then you give it to someone else to pick it apart and help you make it perfect. If you feel something is wrong, you should improve it before asking others, because they are either going to ignore you, or repeat what you already know. If you really can’t figure out what’s wrong with your comic, maybe take a step back from your own and look at well accomplished ones. 

I suggest, taking some time off, drawing casually, studying other people’s comics, and looking up tutorials for a while. After a couple months come back to it and really look at it critically. You might want to scrap it for a new project or start over. You might even think it’s salvageable, and try to make it work. It’s really up to you." 

A review of my webcomic that proves people are dicks on the internet.
Start of nuzlocke comic leafgreen

Opening sequence
Prof oak "affectionately called pokemon professor"
Boy or girl joke
Name
Rival grandson...er, was it douche?
Withdrew potion from computer
Mom says all boys leave home. It said so on TV
Chose lvl. 5 squirtle named maka gentle nature
Battle against douche

Route 1
Pokedex that's empty
Oak is too old
Caught daisy (rattata) on route 1 lvl 3
Brave nature

Route 22
Caught jackiechan at route 22 Mankey with jolly nature lvl2

Route 2
Caught male pidgey lvl 3 named Ralph with a serious nature
Daisy died at lvl 5 due to poison about 5 steps away from p. C.

Viridian forest
Caught lvl 3 male weedle named chuck with timid nature
Chuck died route 2 to critical tackle from rattata lvl 3
Fought multiple bug trainers. Really annoying.
Ralph learned gust to blow away the competition

Pewter city
Beat Brock gym with bubbles and low kicks at the pewter gym
Earned boulder badge with Brock
Got running shoes from mom

Route three
Hi I like shorts lol
Almost lost Jackie chan to nidoran to poison
Evolved ralphie to pidgeotto
Caught catnisse lvl3 jigglypuff with brave nature female

Mt moon
Caught alucardala at mt moon docile nature lvl 8
Used moon stone on catnisse lvl 6
Picked up helix fossil

Route four
Caught lucifer lvl 8 with a modest nature. A spearow

Cerulean city
Fought douche again
Got fame checker from him then sold it at pawn shop
Boxed alucardala
Fought five mystery trainers and wanted to join team rocket got nugget instead
Beat misty with two bites from wartortle then she got rabies

Route 24
Caught lvl 13 female bellsprout with rash nature named cello

Route 25
Caught Sabrina abra lvl 11 with sassy nature female
Met bill who's a clefairy went into changing machine but I walked out the door and he's stuck in the machine
Zubat died to Mistys gym at lvl 8-10
R. I. P.
Pairings:
1. Lucifer the spearow and Sabrina the abra
2. Ralph the pidgeotto and maka the wartortle
3. Jackiechan the Mankey and catnisse the wigglytuff

Route 5
Caught jewel lvl 14 meowth the female with modest nature
Burnt down daycare center :)

Route 6

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HunterxColleen Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2014
Hello, I have questions:

1. Do you know Geronimo Stilton cartoon show?

2. Do you know Digimon Tamers?

3. Do you know Ice Age 4?

4. Do you know ice Age 3?

5. Do you know Disney's Peter Pan?

6. Do you know Return to neverland?

7. Do you know My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic?

8. Do you know My Little Pony: Equestria Girls movie?

9. Do you know the Universal animated movie, The Adventures of Brer Rabbit?

10. Do you know Disney's Peter and the Wolf?

11. Do you know the Don Bluth film, Rock-A-Doodle?

12. Do you know the cartoon, Oscar's Oasis?

13. Do you know The Secret of NIMH?

14. Do you know Legends of Oz: Dorothy's Return?

15. Do you know Disney's Snow White?

16. Do you know Rio 1 & 2?

17. Do you know Gnomeo and Juliet?

18. Do you know An American Tail films 1-4?

19. Do you know Wunschpunsch?

20. Do you know The Flight Before Christmas, with the villain, Black Wolf?
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howtobeast101 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
ice age 4, rio 1 and 2, and ice age 3
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howtobeast101 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Most of those. Why?
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HunterxColleen Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2014
To share interests, may you please answer each of them so I know which ones you know and which ones you don't know?
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RoadkillFox Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Hey, are you willing to take a request? It'd be something small and quick, even if it's lineart or a sketch.
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howtobeast101 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ya sure, what would you like?
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RoadkillFox Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Would you mind making me a picture of Sheik? I've become obsessed! lol
but yeah, anything you wanna do is fine by me :) It's very kind of you! Thank you very much!
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KurisuKiss Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Heyy! sorry about the late upload, but its finally up!! here's he link: kurisukiss.deviantart.com/art/…
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LolaFerricks Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Heya! :D

I've just started a new contest in collaboration with a friend of mine! :)
:star: Would you like to join?
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howtobeast101 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah sure i'll join and i will also be very willing to contribute a prize or gift.
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